Blog 3

Since the grade that I received for my paper was substandard, I still ought to add other gears to my writing machinery; thus, I intend to exploit the time that this memorial weekend has granted me. Like I mentioned previously, one of my main areas of limitation at this time revolves around impersonal form of writing. I wish to come closer to the reader with witty commentary instead of boring them with a plethora of nicely knitted sentences and esoteric words. I find that people not only become disinterested, but also have a hard time understanding the material. Adding more direct, accessible commentary could harness the focus of the reader and, simultaneously, raise the level of interest.
Somehow, I find myself enjoying this loftier standards; I have always thought education in America, in its conventional, is mediocre at best. Basically, you show some effort and the teacher will award you with a halfhearted “A.” My previous teacher would have thrown that letter grade at me without wavering, which would have not encouraged me to look farther into myself and advance beyond the expectations of the class. Maybe you can call me an over achiever, but I am an inflexible abdicate for constant self improvement. From the day one is born into the world to the time for that last melancholic repose, one can never, accurately, say that one is seamless, having no flaws to carve out. I find this particularly true in respect to witting. Therefore, I will try to forsake my comfort zone and search that line between academic and personal. I plan to twist that line as much as possible.

Blog 2

My style leans more to the verbose side with varying sentence structures. I enjoy this form of writing because it allows for complex thought and descriptions, as well as allow for a more uninterrupted flow. My voice in this paper remains passive; I still need to incorporate my personality as a writer within the essay. I have not taken that many risks but I think I will try to craft some wit and side commentary (meta-commentary.) Usually I am sardonic and cynical in life so to accomplish it; I don’t think I will have to scan outside of my current mentality, putting false thought into the paper. Instead just I will just let myself open a little more and not worry about remaining distant and professional.
As for my outside sources I am having some trouble, since the band I am researching, VNV Nation remains hidden underground. But I did find some information. The most exceptional findings are two interviews with the main vocalist, Ronan Harris. He is very loquacious, which provides me with a lot of material on the origin of the music; however, as for professional, noteworthy critique on the sound, I still remain unsatisfied. The FIU Website did not provide me with info either so I will have to find another way to circumvent this problem.
Obviously, the piece still has much room for improvement; therefore I will have to keep trying different approaches to fulfill the assignment. Hopefully the final product will show itself to be satisfactory by the standards of this class.

Blog 1: First Essay

Being a firm abdicate to the philosophy that nobody is above self improvement, I am sincere to myself, maybe to a cruel degree, about the things that I need work on. More specifically, though, I believe that there are two major problems with my writing.

The first and perhaps the most crucial one goes as follows: because of my writing methods I believe that organization is the most predominant problem in my essays. When I sit down to write, I brainstorm for about fifteen minutes and simply start writing in a deductive manner. Therefore, it might not be until the middle of the essay when I realize that an element of the essay would have a much more relevant placement in the beginning complementing other elements better and allowing for a more fluent transition. Most of the times I am able to simply edit out this disruption of flow; however, sometimes the essay is tightly comprised and to add the new information would ultimately disrupt the whole essay. To correct this problem, I am going to challenge myself to device a blueprint of my essay that is detailed buttress the flow and direction of the paper, but remains ambiguous enough to still allow discovery.
The other flaw that I constantly run into in my papers revolves around the irresponsible overuse of abstruse diction that I use to embellish my essay. The result is an extremely verbose essay that makes me seem pretentious as a writer and ultimately steers the focus of my audience. I have decided that I do not want my essays to bewilder the reader by an excess of esoteric words that keep them reaching for the dictionary; instead, I want the ideas behind those words to enter the reader and impact them in a more profound level.
Over the course of this class I will address this two issues and be open for further criticism from both my instructor and peers. I will try to reciprocate the favor as well.